读后续写主要涉及四方面读写综合能力
①把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力。
学习者需要了解所给短文的主要内容，
捕捉文中关键词和语言结构、
语言特色的使用情况，
并在续写的短文中表现出来。
②语言运用的准确性和丰富性。
学习者能准确、恰当地使用或模仿
所学词汇和语言特色、结构，
还能够根据内容需要变换较多、
较复杂的词汇和语言结构。
③对语篇结构的把控能力。
学习者需要掌握上下文逻辑关系，
所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语之间要有连贯性，
所续写的短文内语句
要逻辑合理、连贯、有序。
④创造性思维能力。
学习者所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容，
包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。
一、读后续写STEP1：精读所给文章
（记叙文）
Read to learn
（1）Who（谁）+ When（在什么时间）+Where（在哪里）+ Do what (做了什么/发生了什么)+Why（为什么做/为什么会发生）+How（事情如何发展）
（2）故事的起因/背景+经过（铺垫+高潮+转折）+结果
- of mine whose name was John Smith had a bad memory, which made him famous + It wasn’t that he was not clever, as some critical people tended to say, but just very very absent-minded.
My friend John Smith had a bad memory.
This is not because he is not smart, but because he is extremely absent-minded.
- 层次三：段落中的其他补充/说明句---Since Smith was a professor at a well-known university, his forgetfulness was often an embarrassment to him.
As Smith is a professor at a famous university, his forgetfulness often embarrasses him.
②Paragraph 2: 故事的经过
- 铺垫：On hot summer day, Professor Smith decided to take his children to a seaside town about a three-hour train ride away. To make the trip more interesting for his young children, he kept the name of the town a secret.
- 概括提炼：Who+When+Do what+Why
One summer, Professor Smith decided to take his children to a seaside town. In order to make his children more interested in the trip, he kept the name of the town secret.
- 高潮（定位词：However）：However, by the time they arrived at the station, Smith forgot the name of the town he was planning to visit.
When they arrived at the station, Smith forgot the name of the town he planned to visit.
- 转折（定位词：Luckily）: Luckily, a friend of his happened to be in the station. He offered to take care of the children while Smith hurried back home to find out where he was going.
- 概括提炼：Who+When+Where+Do what
Smith’s friend happened to be at the station. He offered to look after the children, while Smith hurried home to know where he was going.
③Paragraph 3&4&5: 故事的经过---转折后承接的第二个高潮
- 概括提炼：Who+When+Where+Do what+How develop
- How to develop: 看时间状语或者衔接词（Firstly/Secondly…）
- 概括提炼：Who+When+Where+Do what+How develop
- How develop: 看时间状语或者衔接词（Firstly/Secondly…）
二、读后续写STEP2：根据续写段落的首句提示，结合原文本行文思路，确定续写内容的段落结构，逻辑。
Learn for writing
1、续写段落提示句： “What’s the matter now?” asked his wife.
(1) The professor is forgetful, so he must have forgotten something when he returned for the third time. 教授健忘，所以第三次返回，一定是又忘了什么.
①每一个人物都有存在的意义：原文一共有四个主要人物---Smith，his wife，his children, his friend.
- Smith和his wife已经在原文进行了具体描写。而his children and his friend只是作了一个简单的出场，还有继续展开的空间。
- 因此可以确定：续文中他“forget”的“人”可以是” his children and his friend”
②关注关键人物出没的地点：原文中有两个重要地点---home and train station.
- 结尾处，Smith 最后出现的地点是 home.
- 续写段落开头提示句，wife看到Smith提问的地点也是home.
- 因此可以确定，他forget的“地点”可以是“train station”.
- Smith forgot which train station he left his children at.
- Smith forgot who was the one who took care of his children.
①铺垫：Smith又忘了一件很重要的事，却不敢直接对妻子说---妻子对他进行逼问。
②高潮1：Smith在无奈道出他忘了孩子被放在了哪个车站----妻子大惊失色。
③转折：Smith安慰妻子，告诉她孩子安全没有问题，有朋友照顾----妻子听后，冷静了些许----她随即急中生智，让他打电话给那位朋友，询问所在车站。
④高潮2：Smith告诉妻子，他也忘了那个朋友是谁。
①铺垫：Smith又忘了一件很重要的事，却不敢直接对妻子说---妻子猜到了他有事瞒着（陈述）---因为她看到了Smith躲闪的眼神，那是有所隐瞒的表现（对应论据）---于是对他进行逼问。
②高潮1：Smith在无奈道出他忘了孩子被放在了哪个车站----妻子大惊失色（陈述）---大惊失色的原因是他们的孩子还不满10岁，无法自己找到回家的路，安全也无法保证（对应论据）
③转折：Smith安慰妻子，告诉她孩子安全没有问题，有朋友照顾----妻子听后，冷静了些许（陈述）----因为有朋友照顾，至少安全可以得到保证（对应论据）---她随即急中生智，让他打电话给那位朋友，询问所在车站。
④高潮2：然而Smith告诉妻子，他也忘了那个朋友是谁。
⑤结尾：妻子彻底情绪崩溃（陈述）---因为她也已经束手无策了（对应论据）。
1、圈画出文中的细节描写，对其使用效果和使用目的做分析。
圈画出文中的语言特色（修辞+从句+句式），对其使用效果和使用目的做分析。
- 以下给小伙伴举例作示范（1个修辞+三个从句+三个句式）。
四、读后续写STEP4：
根据分析结果，模仿原文写作风格，完成故事续写。
Reading & Learning are for writing
把原文中出现的修辞、句式、从句，模仿着写到自己的续写中。
①至少使用2-5个动作描写，1-2个环境描写，1-2个语言描写，1-2个心理描写。
②至少使用1个夸张修辞，1-2个定语从句，1-2个状语从句(其中含一个方式状语)，1-2个宾语从句。
③句式变换多样的同时，模仿使用“it was not that….but that….”,”so ….that”，分词作伴随状语。
2、写作时：描写动作，可以使用副词进行修饰，描写环境/神态/心理时，可以使用形容词性的单词/词块/短语进行修饰。
词汇运用时，尽可能地不要使用笼统词汇，而是经细分过的具体词汇。
段落提示句：“What’s the matter now?” asked his wife.
①铺垫：Smith stood stupefied at the door. He forgot another important thing, but he was afraid to tell his wife directly. Looking at Smith's dodging eyes, his wife seemed to guess that he was hiding something. So she forced him to ask: “tell me the truth quickly, what else have you forgotten?”
②高潮1：The hot sun scorched his back. Smith's lips trembled, and sweat soaked his white shirt. After hesitating for a moment, he finally said helplessly, "I forgot which station the child was put in. "While hearing this, the wife was shocked. Their children were so young that they could not find their own way home, and their safety could not be guaranteed.
③转折：Fortunately, Smith immediately comforted his wife and told her, "There is no problem with the children's safety, and my friend is taking care of them. " Not surprisingly, after knowing this news, his wife calmed down a little. She supposed that since there was a friend taking care of children, as her husband said, at least their safety can be guaranteed. At the same time, the wife who always made people feel intelligent used her quick wits and urged Smith to call the friend and ask about the station’s location.
④高潮2：However, the husband bowed his head and guiltily told his wife that he had forgotten who his friend was.
⑤结尾：At that moment, his wife’s emotion was breakdown like a collapsed building. It was not that she got mad, but just she had been at a loss.
五、读后续写STEP5：
阅读自己的续写作品，圈画出与原文相对应的语言使用特色。
Written for reading
①铺垫：Smith stood stupefied（副词修饰动作描写） at the door. He forgot another important thing, but he was afraid to tell his wife directly. Looking at（现在分词作伴随状语） Smith's dodging eyes, his wife seemed to guess that he was hiding something. Therefore(连接词), she forced（动词，体现出催促，逼问） him to ask: “tell me the truth quickly, what else have you forgotten?”
②高潮1：The hot sun scorched his back（环境描写）. Smith's lips trembled, and sweat soaked his white shirt. After hesitating for a moment, he finally said helplessly（副词修饰动作描写）, "I forgot which station the child was put in. "（语言描写）While（时间状语） hearing this, the wife was shocked. Their children were so young that they could not find their own way home, and their safety could not be guaranteed.
③转折：Fortunately（连接词）, Smith immediately comforted（副词修饰动作描写） his wife and told her, "There is no problem with the children's safety, and my friend is taking care of them. （语言描写）" Not surprisingly（连接词）, after knowing this news, his wife calmed down（心理描写） a little. She supposed that（宾语从句+心理描写） since there was a friend taking care of children, as her husband said（as引导方式状语从句）, at least their safety can be guaranteed. At the same time（时间状语）, the wife who always made people feel intelligent（定语从句） used her quick wits and urged(动作描写) Smith to call the friend and ask about the station’s location.
④高潮2：However（连接词）, the husband bowed（动作描写） his head and guiltily told his wife that he had forgotten who his friend was（宾语从句）.
⑤结尾：At that moment, his wife’s emotion was breakdown like a collapsed building(夸张修辞). It was not that she got mad, but just she had been at a loss（心理描写）.（It was not that….but that…）
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