范文 1: My weekend （我的周末）
字数要求：150
This weekend was full of adventure! I woke up early on Saturday and headed to the mountains for aday of hiking. The trail was challenging, but the views were breathtaking[JI1] . I could see for miles and the fresh air was invigorating. After the hike[JI2] , I met up with some friends for a picnic by a lake. We enjoyed the sunshine and good food, then took a swim to cool off. On Sunday, I visited a local art museum and saw some amazing pieces. I was particularly drawn to the impressionist paintings[JI3] and spent hours admiring them. In the evening, I cooked a delicious dinner at home and watched a movie with my roommate. It was a relaxing end to a fun-filled weekend. I can't wait to plan my next adventure!
[JI1]Sentence is parallel. This means that both halves of the sentence follow the same pattern (Subject - linking verb - adjective).
平衡两段句子结构：主语-链接动词-形容词
[JI2]Beginning a sentence with a prepositional phrase.
高分亮点：介词短语开头
[JI3]Mentioning one specific type of painting. The more specific the better.
高分亮点：细节描写
范文 2: My favourite school subject （我最喜欢的学科）
字数要求：250
I have always had a passion for mathematics. Ever since I was young, I have been fascinated by numbers and the logical patterns that they create. When I started school, I eagerly looked forward to my mathematics classes each day, eager to learn more and to delve deeper into this subject thatcaptivated[JI1] my imagination.
Mathematics has always been my favourite subject, and I have found a great deal of satisfaction in mastering its concepts and solving problems. To me, it is a subject that is both challenging and rewarding, and I have always enjoyed themental gymnastics[JI2] that are required to understand complex mathematical concepts. I love the feeling of satisfaction that comes from solving a difficult problem, and I enjoy the sense of accomplishment that I feel when I finally understand a concept that has eluded me for some time.[JI3]
I have been fortunate to have had a number of excellent mathematics teachers throughout my academic career, who have encouraged me to pursue my passion for this subject. They haveinstilled[JI4] in me a love for mathematics that has only grown stronger over time, and I have been inspired by their enthusiasm and commitment to teaching. I have also been fortunate to have had opportunities to participate in mathematics competitions and to participate in research projects[JI5] that have allowed me to further explore my interests in this field.
In conclusion, mathematics is a subject that is both challenging and rewarding, and I find a great deal of satisfaction in mastering its concepts and solving problems. I have been fortunate to have had excellent teachers and opportunities to explore my passions, and I am eager to continue pursuing my interests in this field in the future.
[JI1]Good vocabulary. 高分词汇
[JI2]Interesting use of a metaphor. 隐喻运用
[JI3]Contains multiple clause types (independent, adjective and adverb clauses) 多种从句运用
[JI4]Good use of a verb. 高分动词
[JI5]Parallel infinitive and prepositional phrases.
动词不定式to do和介词短语运用
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