一、作文题目
每个人都有自己难忘的事情，请用英文描述一件令你难忘的事情。词数：≥80。
二、高分范文
It was a usual school day，so usual that I nearly fell asleep on the metro after a long day of learning.
Young man，don't you see the granddad standing so long？
Show some respect and give your seat！'All of a sudden and with great anger，a middle-aged woman rebuked a young man in his seat.And almost immediately，more passengers began to echo her rebuke bemoaning his incivility.In spite of this，the young man still kept his head down without saying or doing anything.
I lifted my dim eyes and took a close look at him:it was easy to tell from his tired look that he might have had a long day of work，just as I did.‘Calm down！His mother passed away this afternoon！'the girl in the next seat choked out...
This usual day has thus become one of my most unforgettable days which always reminds me not to jump to any conclusions before having all the facts.
三、技巧点拨
（一）审题立意
根据题目说明，本篇作文在体裁上是一篇记叙文，要求描述一件难忘的事情。
（二）谋篇布局
根据题目内容和体裁，可以按以下结构安排来写作。
1、第一段
简单交代事情发生的背景，如时间、地点等。
2、第二段
详细描述事情的原由、经过、结果。
3、第三段
简单描述此事的影响。
一次难忘的经历英语作文
（三）遣词造句
1、第一段
记叙文的要素中，时间和地点一般都会最先交代。考虑到文章的篇幅所限，本段里最好开门见山予以交代。如下面的范文所示：
It was a usual school day，so usual that I nearly fell asleep on the metro after a long day of learning.
【注意】
虽然本文要求描述难忘的一天，但本段开头却以a usual school day开头，其实是要达到欲扬先抑的效果，而且作者通过so usual that..的补充说明，进一步铺垫这一天一开始看起来的usual。
2、第二段
作为记叙文的核心内容，本段要详细描述事情的原由、经过和结果。如下面的范文所示：
Young man，don't you see the granddad standing so long？
Show some respect and give your seat！'All of a sudden and with great anger，a middle-aged woman rebuked a young man in his seat.And almost immediately，more passengers began to echo her rebuke bemoaning his incivility.In spite of this，the young man still kept his head down without saying or doing anything.I lifted my dim eyes and took a close look at him:it was easy to tell from his tired look that he might have had a long day of work，just as I did.'Calm down！His mother passed away this afternoon！'the girl in the next seat choked out..
为了与第一段所描述的“平常“形成更大的反衬，本段开头采取了“先声夺人”的手法，通过一位中年女士的突然斥责，打破了一路上的平静，从而引出了事情的原由——年轻人不给老人让座（give his seat），遭到了旁人的斥责（rebuke）。
紧接着，其他乘客也跟着一起责备年轻人的“不像话”，不给老人让座。在用词上，选用了echo her rebuke bemoaning his incivility，来表示对中年女士斥责的附和。
然而，年轻人对此却无动于衷，只是低着头（kept his head down），什么也没说，什么也没做（without saying or doing anything）。
此时，作为旁观者的作者，也被斥责声给吵醒了，于是睁开惺松的双眼（lifted my dim eyes）仔细看了看年轻人（took a close look at him）：看起来这位年轻人是一脸疲惫（his tired look），就跟作者自己一样（just as I did）。这个时候，又有一个声音响起了，只是此时不是斥责声，而是带着哭腔的幽怨（choked out）："大家都冷静一下（Calm down）！
他的妈妈下午过世了（passed away）！"
而到了这里，作者却采用了省略号结尾，把事情的结果留给了读者去想象——这其实是个不言而喻的结果。
3、第三段
记叙一件事情，往往有其背后的原因，所以作者在最后对这件突发的平常却又值得深思的事情，进行了反思总结。如下面的范文所示：
This usual day has thus become one of my most unforgettable days which always reminds me not to jump to any conclusions before having all the facts.
本段通过usual和unforgettable两个词的总结，突出了这件事情的难忘之处，然后借用which引导的定语从句，总结出这件事情对作者的影响——遇事不能轻易下结论（not to jump to any conclusions before having all the facts）。
（四）举一反三
第一段也可以这样写：
It was a usual day，when I took my usual metro after my usual lesson and fell asleep as usual.
第二段无需做大的改动，可以在部分遣词造句上这样写：
Young man，don't you see the granddad standing so long？
Show some respect and give your seat！'A middle-aged woman burst out rebuking a young man in his seat.And all of a sudden，more passengers began to bemoan the young man's incivility one after another.However，the young man remained still in his seat，completely ignoring what was going on.I lifted my dim eyes and took a close look at him：it was easy to tell from his tired look that he might have had a long day of work，just as I did.'Show some mercy please！
His mother passed away this afternoon！'the girl in the next seat choked out...
第三段可以这样总结：
This is a usual yet unforgettable day which always reminds me not to jump to any conclusions before having all the facts.
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