一、作文题目
以“Our English Teacher"为题,写一篇短文。词数:≥80。
二、技巧点拨
(一)审题立意
根据题目说明,本篇作文在体裁上是一篇记叙,写一篇短文,介绍自己的英语老师。
(二)谋篇布局
根据题目内容和体裁,本篇短文可分三段进行写作。
1、第一段
开门见山点明要介绍的英语老师是谁。
2、第二段
简单介绍其外貌特征及其兴趣爱好。
3、第三段
侧重介绍其教学特点。
(三)遣词造句
1、第一段
用一两句话简单指明要介绍的英语老师是谁,可以增加一句对该老师的笼统介绍。如下面的范文所示:
Our English teacher Mrs.Brown is from Canada.She has been teaching us English for nearly three years.
【注意】
本段可分两个小部分内容,先指明老师是谁,来自哪里,然后告知
其从教时间。
注意第二句话中现在完成进行时的运用,之所以采用该时态,是因
为作者想要表达的是Mrs.Brown已经教了自己三年的英语,而且现在还在教。
2、第二段
本段侧重介绍新家的布局和构造等。如下面的范文所示:
She is a middle-aged woman with fair hair and blue eyes.
She is fairly tall and she is very active in sports and likes to go sightseeing a lot.She has already been to many places of historical interest since she came to China.
【注意】
本段侧重介绍Mrs.Brown的外貌特征和兴趣爱好。
注意对外貌特征的介绍不宜篇幅过长,而要侧重其兴趣爱好的介绍。
在介绍老师的外貌特征时,可用一句话简单描述即可,比如其年龄和脸部特征。为突出后面的兴趣爱好,这句话可采用简单句的形式。注意,该句中的fair hair意思是“金发"。
在介绍老师的兴趣爱好时,可取一两点进行描述。如果只取一个爱好,可用两句话进行描述,先用一句话指出其爱好是什么,然后再用一句话对该爱好进行拓展介绍。注意,句子中的go sightseeing意思是“观光旅游”,place of interest表示”名胜古迹"。
3、第三段
该段为全文重点,要侧重介绍Mrs.Brown的教学特点及其对学生的关爱。如下面的范文所示:
Mrs.Brown is a good teacher.She has a special way of teaching,which makes her classes lively and interesting.
She is also very warm-hearted,never failing to give ustimely help whenever needed.Next month she will finish her teaching in our school and will return to Canada.We will miss her a lot.
【注意】
本段以简单句开头,指出Mrs.Brown是个好老师。接着以which引导的非限定性定语从句,介绍她的教学特点,即lively和interesting。然后下一句通过also指出其为人如何,即warm-hearted,同时以never failing引导的分词短语结构作为伴随状语,补充说明其对学生的关爱。
本段最后作者以and引导的并列句指出Mrs.Brown即将要结束其教学并回到加拿大,所以接着作者以一句简单句,简洁明了地表明大家会因此非常想念Mrs.Brown。
三、高分范文
Our English Teacher Our English teacher Mrs.Brown is from Canada.She has been teaching us English for nearly three years.
She is a middle-aged woman with fair hair and blue eyes.
She is fairly tall and she is very active in sports and likes to go sightseeing a lot.She has already been to many places of historical interest since she came to China.
Mrs.Brown is a good teacher.She has a special way of teaching,which makes her classes lively and interesting.She is also very warm-hearted,never failing to give us timely help whenever needed.Next month she will finish her teaching in our school and will return to Canada.We will miss her a lot.
四、举一反三
1、第一段
本段也可以这么写:
Our English teacher Mrs.Brown,who comes from Canada,has been teaching us for nearly three years.
2、第二段
本段也可以这么写:
She is in her fifties,but with fair hair and blue eyes,she looks much younger than her age.She likes traveling verymuch and has already visited many scenic spots in China.
3、第三段
本段也可以这么写:
Mrs.Brown is a good teacher.She can always manage to make her classes so lively and interesting that every one of us likes her classes very much.She is also ready to give us timely help whenever needed.However,she will go back to Canada next month,so we will miss her a lot.
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