新高考读后续写（75）| 梳理情节和情感变化，高分续写不再难​

新高考读后续写（75）| 梳理情节和情感变化，高分续写不再难

 

情节是指叙事作品中表现人物之间关系的一系列生活时间的发展过程。它由一系列展示人物性格，表现人物与人物、人物与环境之间关系的具体事件构成。考生可以根据以下方式梳理原文情节：

 

1.  根据时空顺序来梳理。

2.  根据叙述结构来梳理。

3.  根据文本线索来梳理。

梳理好情节后，考生可以灵活运用以下两种思维模板来概括原文情节或主旨。

（1）完整叙述的思维模板。用“何时何地何人做了何事”的格式加以概括。“何事”一环中有时包含“原因、经过、结果”。

（2）主人物角度叙述的思维模板。当故事比较复杂、涉及人物较多时，为避免前后情节的相互交错，可以从主人物角度叙述事件过程，即故事主人物开始做了什么，然后做了什么，接着做了什么，最后做了什么。主人物事件发生的过程就是情节梳理过程。

真题分析

 

It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.

We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.

His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.

In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn't going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don't be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don't get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.

 

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：

3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

 

Paragraph 1:

Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph 2:

We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

1. 根据时间顺序梳理原文情节，并梳理主人物情感的变化。

根据“何时何地何人做了何事”的完整叙述思维模板，原文情节可如下概括：

 

One summer, far away from Uncle Paul's farm house, the writer and his dad went on a vacation, riding horses in the wild and get lost.

 

2. 根据叙述结构梳理原文情节，并梳理主人物情感的变化。

3. 根据文本线索梳理原文情节，并梳理主人物情感的变化。

高分范文

 

Paragraph 1 :

Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Afraid that I might hurt the lovely small creature, I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse. However, it became scared and started to run like crazy. “Don't let go of the rope! Keep calm!” yelled Dad. I followed what he told me. To my relief, it stopped slowly. But before we jumped off the horses, we found that we had been off the beaten track and got lost.

 

 

Paragraph 2:

We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could find our way back. I kept shouting for help, hoping my shouts could be heard by someone, but there was no reply. Dad sounded a little worried as he reminded me to calm down. It was then that my mind raced. “Listen, Dad, the rushing river water,” I shouted excitedly, “we can return to the farm house down the river.” Before long, we caught sight of the lights in the distance. We knew we were safe. What a thrilling vacation we had!

 

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